Favorite Paper

     My favorite paper of the year is the advertisement analysis. The ad I chose is of a topic I love and enjoy writing about. The ad was of Mass effect 3. As an avid gamer I was easily able to compare it to other video game ads. I am huge fan of the mass effect series so I was really excited to write about it in any form.
     I did get carried away when writing the introduction paragraph. I had one choice in advertisements of Mass effect 3. This made my choice extremely easy.

My argument

     Occasionally the ESRB rating system is flawed in what a game gets. T rating and M ratings have very similar criteria. Certain games that should receive an AO rating get an M due to sloppy rating. 

    My strongest evidence is that the criteria for an M rating is similar to a T rating. Because M rating requires an adult present to buy it and a T rating dosen't, there is a bigger consequence for an improper rating. These two ratings should separate more to avoid a parent unintentionally buying a game that they don't seem fit for their child.

    My weakest evidence is the difference between an M rating and AO. The age requirement between the two is only 1 year, but the criteria for each is much more vast than a T and M. This isn't also as much of a parental concern than the previous argument. It is there just to give better examples of how there have been mistakes by the ESRB.

Arguments analyzed

I analyzed the argument "should the Obama generation drop out?" The tone of the argument feels informal, but doesn't seem to work with the subject he is arguing for. The author tries to target a broad audience from those in college to those already with a bachelors. This makes it lose the personal feel when his argument is based on being personal problems. When the author uses a percentage to bolster his argument he fails due to the percentage range being to big. This made him lose credibility and hampered any future evidence he brings up.

Peer reviewing Peer reviews

I find peer review effective in that I can talk to the person reviewing my paper during the review, and get instant feedback. This helps me get a quick understanding of my mistakes. I think peer review also has flaws since we all are on a relative writing skill level. This could be fixed if the teacher reviewed a second rough daft after the peer review. Two rough drafts will probably help instead of having us do rewrites. It is basically the same thing but the grade isn't given out till the final.
The only the strength I have as a peer reviewer is that I fully answer the questions on the peer review sheet. My weakness as a peer reviewer is that I don't really look for grammatical mistakes. Unless they are blatantly apparent I will not point it out.
For an ideal peer review process. I think a initial peer review on the rough draft should start it. Then a second rough draft critiqued by the professor. Then the final paper is due. 

Self errors

One of the most common errors in my writing I find is that I forget pronouns or adjectives. I say the sentence in my head and procede to write it down, but my fingers jump some words forward. This is only a problem when I don't check the sentence what I have just written. I do forget to check work before proceeding, so it is a problem.
The next problem is result of the same problem. I lack focus in my writing so my ideas are all over the place. This happens to me while talking with friends over any form of text chat. My friends like to say that it is an evolving conversation. My teachers say I am just not focused.
Another problem I have noticed is that I stray of topic, or I just do something completely opposite of what is asked. I guess it has to do with my lack of focus. Or its the teachers fault for giving such boring assignments, but even then I'd lose focus and diverge from the path. I can see my problems reoccur every writing assignment, yet I can't seem t fix it.

The Obama Generation

Everyone has the capability to achieve a bachelors through a four year college. There are those with finical complicaties where college isn't an option. Outside that there is no viable reason to explain why you wouldn't go to college for a degree in engineering or sciences. Tests of certification are acceptable, but they don't show much else. They only how individual intelligence not work ethic. A gpa measured over 4 years can show consistant effort and long term goals set by the individual.
I'm going into a computer field which can be entered both through a 4 year college and/or certifications. This is options I have been presented with, but while interning I have found that a bachelors degree will help more than a certification.

Progression

I don't see any form of progression in my writing since my first blog post. The topics have slightly changed, so a comparison between writing would not be balanced. I don't know how to see advancement in writing so I won't be able to tell if I improved.
Again I don't know if this class has helped since there has only been one graded paper and these blogs. I think this blog post came way to early into the semester.
I still think this is way to early to fully analyze if this class needs any improvement. I like the peer review of my rough drafts. I think it is the most helpful part of the writing process.
The only reason I see any difference between my writing is that the topic of which I write. I would like to think my writing has improved. I try to make less gramar mistakes in my writing, but I honestly can't tell.
I know this is supposed to be a critical thinking assignment, but I find it difficult to see anything beyond the 1 paper and 4 blogs that have been graded.

Rhetorical Comparison

In both essays the argument made is a single perspective. In the analytical essay is based on the opinions of the writer. The literacy narrative is based on the writers view of past events in his/her life. The purpose of the literacy narrative is to recount a past experience from the writers perspective. The purpose for the analytic essay is to deconstruct an advertisement, for reasons of why it is the way it is.The audience for both the analytic and literacy essay is the professor. The tone of the literacy narrative is nostalgic. While the analytic essay's tone is informative. The genre of the narrative essay is realistic recollection of past events. The genre of the analytic essay is also informative.  The difference between the two will make my writing more opinionated in the analytic essay, where the literacy narrative was my view of a past event.  

Advertisement Analysis

This is an add for the third installment of a series called Mass Effect. The first was released in November of 2007, and since then has told the story of a solider (whom you can create as your own) named Commander Shepard. This third game is the end of the story, and this ad tries to show that it is the biggest one yet.

The purpose of this ad is to show the scale of the game. It shows that the earth is under attack and more is coming. The man infront is the only thing that can save the world and that person is also you.
Since the title shows that it is the 3rd game in the series its audience is the fans the previous 2 games. While it also tries to capture new fans. The overall audience are the sci-fi community.
This is a apocalyptic futuristic sci-fi game.
The tone of the show is a destructive future.

Assignment 3

1. Structure

The structure is the most important aspect of any paper. The structure organizes events, importance, and makes the story/argument flow. What you usually see in a mediocre  paper is a big lack of structure. The main points are there, but they aren't organized properly making each point lacking. A great paper sets up everything in the right order. Making you see a flow of events, and each point makes more sense.

2. Grammar

Bad grammar can be distracting to the reader. Misspelled words aren't that big of a problem between an excellent and mediocre paper. Its the words used to describe the scene and enhance your topic. Using the right words can shorten a paper in the right way. If your descriptions are too long; then your reader looses focus on what is trying to be conveyed.   

3. Captivating

Captivating stories make you want to read them instead of trudging through them. An excellent paper will tell a story that makes you want turn the page over and over again. Mediocre stories convey the feeling that the author did not enjoy writing this and so will you. 

I find structure to be the hardest part for me when I'm writing. Mind wanders about the topic I'm writing about, and in turn my writing dose too.

Essay 1 preview

     My writing has never a strong point for me. I am more left brained than right making me excel at all other subjects other than creative writing. I understand the need for writing in our advancing society so I press on through my slight disadvantage. I will never strive for a career as a writer, but I won't let this stagger any of my writing progresses. This makes writing a more personal challenge for me than most.
     At an early age I found writing easy. I would always ace my essays between the grades of 6 and 8. I knew who the audience and subject dictated that I should write to get an "A". The essays were always persuasive or summaries of books. This made writing structured and easy to write, but never promoted a creative writing passion.
     Once I hit high school I had lost what little desire I had to write anything. I pushed aside any writing assignment, and this made my poor writing skills decrease over time. This continued until I decided to apply for college. This was when I realized how far my writing had fallen. I had to take a developmental writing course in my first semester. By the end of the semester I had acquired some confidence in my writing again.